dawn raid

 

 

in class i did this slide to show what i have found out about writing 

are there any other things good writers do?

I hope you like it.   

stay away from me rap

Stay away from me, your going to die so stop praying on me 

My blood going to go into your eye and i'm going to die 

I play dead like Fred 

Little coward i have more power 

Feet small your four feet tall

Your going to get eaten and beaten so start treating your self fast 

Your body is like a toothpick so your gonna die fast

This is my rap for my reading task

 

superhero story

 “MAYDAY MAYDAY!! There is a out brake at sector four “over”. Push the troops through sector two and then through three to catch them down “over”.

They are playing there hand fast so don’t muck around or we are going to loose them to the virus “over”!

The victims names are Joe and Sam Walder and there not slowing down! ”over”.

I see them there in sector seven “CATCH THEM!” “over”

Me and the troops just went through sector seven? ”over” Are you shore that they just went through sector seven? ”over”.

positive, They went through sector seven, I sore them ”over”. Then they most have snuck past one of us, Because we have no track of where they went “over”

WHY ARE THEY SO GOOD AT THIS! “Over”

They have been doing this for years, They were in the army from 1963 to 2007, They know how to hide.”over”

“There on third flour” “over”.

How did they get up two levels in the building and how do you know there their?

 I’ve got a surveillance officer on fourth flour one flour up from Joe and Sam Walder who are going for the virus, 

Evacuate the building i repeat evacuate the building. 

They have got the virus ”over”.

HOW!!! The virus is on the tenth flour, They were just on the third flour! ”over”.

All the cameras just cut off ”over”.

How? ”over”

They went in the power supply room and cut all the alarms off except for the evacuation alarm. “over”

Can we tern them back on? “over”

Negative, The only way to tern it back on is to go into the room that they turned it off in but it is too high of a risk to do that at this moment of time. “over”

Ok, So what are we going to do? “over”

We have to weight it out until they come out. “over”

I don't think they are going to come out for A while, And what are we going to do about the workers on floor four? “over”

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh.

Scream’s flooding from were the workers are.

I think they are infecting the people on floor four. “over”

Were’s the scientist who made the virus.”over”

He lives in New Zealand, His name is Dr Fraser. “over”

How are we supposed to get him to fix it if he is on the other side of the planet.”over”

We will have to fly him out to here but it will take two days for him to get here so we need to keep it in the building until he gets here.”over”

That will be a hard two days but we need to do it.”over”

Should we get our troops up there and try to get them? “over”

Negative, We can’t risk it we might spreed it even more. “over”

Whats the chance of them coming out of the building? “over”

Probably around forty to fifty percent so very high, so we have to keep our eyes open twenty four seven so don’t get tired. “over”

How do we know that they are still up there they might have got right past us. “over”

They are up there, Because we have no trace of them coming out yet so we are sure there still up there. “over”

But we wont know until Dr Fraser gets here. “over”

Someone up there have smashed glass on floor four. “over”

How can they still be alive? “over”

They probably have turned into mutants because they have gone into they lab with all experiments that they have made over the past forty three years! “over”

Someone’s jumped out of the building! “over”

Tell the troops to get ready for fire. “over”

There just lying there on the ground, I think there dead. “over”

FIRE FIRE FIRE! THERE MOVING!...